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A Leaf on the Wind

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Autobiography of abuse

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Comment from medicnate
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Now we get to learn what his family life was like. I like that this chapter really makes you want to get to the next one as fast as possible. I shall read on.

~medicnate~

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2009


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2009
    My father died unexpectedly forcing everything out into the open.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
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What a cliffhanger! Again, the voices are so very authentic and the content is riviting. The emotion is genuinely conveyed to the reader. Off to read the next chapter! Great work. Seraph

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your continued interest. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Comment from Deejharrington
Exceptional
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Couldn't get any better or more real. Brutal and honest. The heart=breaking emotions just roll off the page. You just want to slap her mother and other relatives. And then she understands why they are angry, she could spill the truth! She's a better person than I would be. I'd be shouting it from the roof tops. Great writing!

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your kind words. There is a fine line between understanding and accepting. While at times I understood the insanity of my family, I never accepted their behavior as acceptable. One of the primary symptoms of abuse is the constnt, desperate need to understand, to know "why"...but there is never an answer that erases the pain or damage. Thank you for your high rating, I sincerely appreciate it.
reply by Deejharrington on 12-Mar-2009
    You are welcome. You deserve it.
Comment from laurelp
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I think I know what your Aunt was telling you. I have very little doubt that I am wrong. Secrets can be the downfall of any family. It can lead to extremes on all kinds.
As before, I found no errors.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
    So true. Secrets breed more secrets and it ony grows with time. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by laurelp on 12-Mar-2009
    My reviews are not just an act of kindness. Your writing has truly caught my interest. I have never experienced a life like yours. And, now at 62 I doubt I ever will. But, your writing has done even more that that. It has opened my eyes. I will not go through the remainder of my life in blinders to life around me. I think I might have known someone in a similar situation decades ago. At least 40 years ago. I tried to be a friend, but her life was such a mess. I made one error in judgement by not coming over when I said I would and instead stayed where I was because I was having a good time. She couldn't handle what she presumed to be rejection. I tried to renew our friendship but she cut me off. I didn't try hard enough. I was only 20 and I didn't think past tomorrow. I tried a few times to contact her, then gave up. We actually talked once. She basically said that if I couldn't devote more time to her, then don't bother. So, I did what she requested. I told her she had my parents number if she ever wanted to get in touch. Now, 40 years later, I regret that decision. I wish I had tried harder.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
    Don't berate yourself. We respond with what we have at the moment...we are human. It is imossible to know what would or would not have happened had you gone over. Believe me, I know from experience, you can 'what if..' yourself into the grave You simply do the best you can. The fact that you still think of your friend shows you are a caring person.
Comment from Lois Delaney
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You leave a good cliff hangar for the following chapter. I am so anxious to read on. Your writing is very good. No errors that I noticed. Can't wait for the next chapter.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
    I am posting two more chapters tomorrow. Thanks for the high rating. Needless to say, my family had it's share of secrets.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
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This is brilliantly written. You've done really well with this chapter, it flows so well and is so vivid I can almost 'see' the people as you speak about them, particularly Auntie Miriam (and your Mum). I do hope you continued to hold firm, you seem to have a new strength in this chapter, one of calm assurance rather than rage. Very well written. No faults.
All the best
Kat

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
    Thanks for the great review. Sorry, have a couple more chapters to go before I get help.
Comment from Luvs2rite4u
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I was very blown away by your way of getting into the heads of your readers. The strength in your writing style combined with your very own emotions has set this book for all to read. again, great job.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your very kind and encouraging worda. This is difficult subject to write about and equally difficult for some to read. I sincerely appreciate your comments,
Comment from Nancylou
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Great chapter. Easy to read for a very hard subject. You don't get caught up in too many words...the story flows easily and is filled with what seems to be accurate emotions. I'm sure this story hits close to home for many "unspoken" secrets in many families. Guilt runs rampant when trust is broken and you have shown that. Nice job.
Nancy

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your kind review. Yes, this is adifficult subjct to both write and read. But my need to be honest to the story has kept me going forward. Again, thank you.
Comment from jodeecee
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By the time I got home, my it was about to explode. (?)

/maybe cut this?-Finally,/ after taking a second handful of aspirins the pounding in my head /finally/ began to subside.

"I'm not go'n anywhere til I get a straight answer from you/"./

I glanced around the room looking for /m/om.

Teresa put her arms around /m/om to comfort her. Mary glared at me/,/ and in a voice filled with pure hatred said, "You are not wanted here. Why don't you just leave?"

Just then, the door opened and /Auntly/ Miriam entered the room.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your continued help with my SPAGS...can't seem to catch my own. Thanks for the high rating.
Comment from adewpearl
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Well, I'm going to guess her big brother molested her when they were young or that her father had molested both her and her brother - these things are most often generational.
I was so glad to see Valerie defend herself to that pompous woman who was acting as if she had a right to criticize what she couldn't possibly know enough about. That was a great bit of dramatic dialogue. This is an action-packed, drama-filled chapter. And it is extremely well-written. Brooke

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your kind and encouragin words. Yes, it was powerful day....