My Book of Favored Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Nevermore"My collection of various sonnets.
17 total reviews
Comment from writeapoem
My first intro to a different kind of poem. It sounds good with a nice rhythm the message of life's evil and trust in angels deliverence. Then the courage to enter the new door.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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My first intro to a different kind of poem. It sounds good with a nice rhythm the message of life's evil and trust in angels deliverence. Then the courage to enter the new door.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Oh thanks so much for visiting that one. That was my life for 18 years living hell.
Comment from butterflytales
I enjoy subjects that make you think about your mortality. It's hard to write about that subject without either making too much light of it or being so grim it's hard to stomach. Thanks for the beautiful compilation.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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I enjoy subjects that make you think about your mortality. It's hard to write about that subject without either making too much light of it or being so grim it's hard to stomach. Thanks for the beautiful compilation.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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Thank you for the beautiful review and for the read, much appreciated.
Comment from Miska
This is so good. I read it over a couple of times and like the way it was left in the lords hands. As far as I can tell the form is perfect. A job well done. best regards Miska
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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This is so good. I read it over a couple of times and like the way it was left in the lords hands. As far as I can tell the form is perfect. A job well done. best regards Miska
Comment Written 03-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Thank you for the wonderful words of review, really appreciate that.
Comment from RapturedHeart
Wow! This is very powerful, Dawn of Tomorrow. Released from the horrifying grip of death. At first I thought it was an abusive lover, but your clever switch in the second stanza is stunning. I'm pretty sure she's passed over from death into eternal life - brilliant! A sure contender here. Take care,
Heather
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Wow! This is very powerful, Dawn of Tomorrow. Released from the horrifying grip of death. At first I thought it was an abusive lover, but your clever switch in the second stanza is stunning. I'm pretty sure she's passed over from death into eternal life - brilliant! A sure contender here. Take care,
Heather
Comment Written 03-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Thank you for the great review, really appreciate it.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
I truly wish I had six stars to offer for this wonderful entry into the Italian Sonnet contest...very dark and wicked great imagery. A beautiful work! Good luck in the contest. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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I truly wish I had six stars to offer for this wonderful entry into the Italian Sonnet contest...very dark and wicked great imagery. A beautiful work! Good luck in the contest. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 03-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Thanks,dear, for the great review, really appreciate it. I gave up on these contest long time ago but love the inspiration they create. Thanks for the vote, really appreciate it. Hugs back, Jo Lynn
Comment from jlsavell
Dawn Of Tomorrow, this reminds me of a women held captive by her own demons, or by an abusive relationship in which she stays out of fear..but then finds the courage and conviction to stand on her own 2 feet and take action..save herself...wonderful write and a difficult task
jlsavell
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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Dawn Of Tomorrow, this reminds me of a women held captive by her own demons, or by an abusive relationship in which she stays out of fear..but then finds the courage and conviction to stand on her own 2 feet and take action..save herself...wonderful write and a difficult task
jlsavell
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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You got that right on the money, it is about an abusive relationship. Thank you for the very understanding review.
Comment from WRITER1
A very excellent sonnet, enjoyable to read. I see no errors or changes that can be made. I enjoyed reading this and hope to see more like it.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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A very excellent sonnet, enjoyable to read. I see no errors or changes that can be made. I enjoyed reading this and hope to see more like it.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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Thank you, really appreciate your time to read and review.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Brilliant work, Jo Lynn. Top drawer poetry here. I am very honored to have this piece entered in my contest. Are you sure you are not a member of Black Rose poetic society? (smile). This write is so typical of them. Oh, hey are very real! I enjoyed your delicious dark write of captivity, physical and emotional, the visuals are so good it is like the reader is able to get a peek at the Spanish Inquisition hall and fell the heroine's despair. You handle this difficult form well.
The only issue I had is the font. I found it a bit hard on the eyes. I thought, though, if the same font be made bold, it would be much easier to read. I also had a bit of trouble with italicized text, found it a bit small. It could be my eyesight, but I had to remark on it. However, it doesn't detract from the beauty of this piece which warrants the full six.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Brilliant work, Jo Lynn. Top drawer poetry here. I am very honored to have this piece entered in my contest. Are you sure you are not a member of Black Rose poetic society? (smile). This write is so typical of them. Oh, hey are very real! I enjoyed your delicious dark write of captivity, physical and emotional, the visuals are so good it is like the reader is able to get a peek at the Spanish Inquisition hall and fell the heroine's despair. You handle this difficult form well.
The only issue I had is the font. I found it a bit hard on the eyes. I thought, though, if the same font be made bold, it would be much easier to read. I also had a bit of trouble with italicized text, found it a bit small. It could be my eyesight, but I had to remark on it. However, it doesn't detract from the beauty of this piece which warrants the full six.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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I don't know of Black Rose poetic society, perhaps I should look into them? I am probably better at writing dark verses than any other as I spent many years living that hell and it comes out in my words. I will try to bold that font, I've had trouble with it. It's different on different monitors, hard to judge it and I've had that italicized text different sizes as well. But I will change it up a bit and see if it's better. Appreciate your six very much as I have a 2 sitting on this and one is never really sure if they are missing the mark somewhere or not. Thanks for the contest. It's a beautiful form, one a form writer could fall in love with.
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Look up Susanne M. Psyris' profile, she is a Vice President of Black Rose Poetic Society (BRPS) and a close friend of mine. PM her, I am sure they would love you as a member. Outstanding entry, fondly, Yelena. BTW, the bold font looks much better. Happy Holidays!
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent Italian sonnet form as I would expect as you always master these difficult forms - the story is quite compelling in its tragic proportions. That she finds release in the end forms a turn that is hardly happy happy but shows the hope found only in death for some.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Excellent Italian sonnet form as I would expect as you always master these difficult forms - the story is quite compelling in its tragic proportions. That she finds release in the end forms a turn that is hardly happy happy but shows the hope found only in death for some.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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She didn't die actually. An angel delivered her. True story actually but don't guess I've made that area clear enough. Will give some thought on how to make it stronger, thank you for your time, dear and I hope you have a very Merry Christmas, big warm hug from me to you.
Comment from rmdelta
Dawn of Tomorrow,
Ok, Dawn. This is probably a good time to tell you that I seldom can understand most poetry and certainly cannot tell the difference between an Italian sonnet, an American sonnet and a shinku, or whatever those with the Japanese names are. I know what I like when I read it. That's how it is with just about all you write.
I can understand what's been written-they make sense. This particular poem is beautiful, Dawn. Strong writing and fits in perfectly with society today with spousal abuse and child abuse so prevelant. Thats the message I took from it, whether that was intended or not. Great work, my friend.
Reggie
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Dawn of Tomorrow,
Ok, Dawn. This is probably a good time to tell you that I seldom can understand most poetry and certainly cannot tell the difference between an Italian sonnet, an American sonnet and a shinku, or whatever those with the Japanese names are. I know what I like when I read it. That's how it is with just about all you write.
I can understand what's been written-they make sense. This particular poem is beautiful, Dawn. Strong writing and fits in perfectly with society today with spousal abuse and child abuse so prevelant. Thats the message I took from it, whether that was intended or not. Great work, my friend.
Reggie
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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I think you understand more than you claim to. You hit that interpretation right on the mark. Thank you for that, have a couple of reviewers who didn't quite grasp it, actually got a 2 so your review, makes me smile. Hugs and a very Merry Christmas, friend.
