Comment from percival86jack

Excellent

Wow! Good stuff! Being a retired graphic designer, I appreciate the effort you creatively put into this piece. Really unique and extremely well done my friend.
Cheers, Jack

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2009

Comment from Xylok

Excellent

what you have created here is amazing. so very creative and so very cool. poetry in motion as it were, better than ee cummings even who made his poem about falling leaves look like the wafting descent of a leaf itself. i thought that was cool but this is better. well done! i applaud you for the imagery you deliver with the closing lines as well.
im out of six stars or you'd be getting one. excellent poem, thanks for sharing it.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2009

Comment from Justin Chopin

Excellent

Absolutely fabulous. Great job with the poetry I loved every single moment of it and thought that it was very well written and very enjoyable to read.

 Comment Written 27-May-2009

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

A really clever piece of work.

Shape poems are not always easy,
are they. I attempted my first one
ever here on site, and actually won
the contest, much to my amazement.

This is a great effort - good luck.
Margaret.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2008

Comment from Adam Smith

Excellent

Well, I think this is graceful, as intended, as far as the visual goes, but it is hard to read and shouldn't need instructions. Also, the ... ... and @ seem to be cheating a bit. But I appreciate the effort that went into creative this visual treat and respect the opinions of the other reveiwers as well.

Now that I understand the form better, I'm upgrading my rating, as the reasons I deducted from the rating have been explained to my satisfaction and I realize I had misinterpreted some things. Thanks, Helvi for the tutoring.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2008

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008

Hi Adam, :o) The reason my poem is different is because I wanted to create something new. I was really honored when Josipher saw my first poem in this style and created a contest from it. I wanted to create a picture that you could enjoy looking at, that also contained a poem you could read. My idea was what Josipher was looking for in this contest. :o) It's not shape poetry, it's designer poetry. :o) Including the @ allows you to create an airy poem. Only a mere few had trouble reading it.We are suppose to be original with our writing. This is just a new style. If you can create something with words and make a picture out of it, I thnk that is unique. :o) All you had to do to read it was start at the curve in the neck and read downward following the outline of the body, ending at the tail. Then read the from the beak over the head. The rest was laid out as a regular poem by reading the wing then the blue water.If instructions would be helpfu lto the reader I wanted to include them. I don't think there is anything wrong with it.I'm sorry that you don't care for it, most of the writers do. You have your own opinion and I respect that. It's impossibe to get 100% of the people to like what you do, although I would have loved to have gotten you too smile...maybe next time. Thanks so much for the review. :o) ...Helvi :o)

reply by Adam Smith on 28-Jul-2008

I did find it enjoyable and a pleasure to look at. I found it very creative. I may have misinterpreted the contest a bit and now that I understand this form better, based upon your explanation, I can understand how the @ can fit in and are allowable.

I appreciate your explanation, particularly because you were tactful and not condescending or angry about my review.

Thank you for your patience with me.

Sincerley, Adam

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008

Hi Adam, :o)
Thank you for the wonderful upgrade. I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem. You have made my day. Any time you decide to drop by and leave a review, I promise I won't bite your head off.
Someone once told me,"Your poem belongs in the deepest, darkest pit of Hell's Library!" No matter how much you dislike someone's work, there is no reason to respond that way. When I send or receive a review I would never attack someone like that. I know there are some people who do though, but you'll never get a reponse that's mean from me.

Thanks again for your kind words,
Helvi :o)

Comment from bard owl

Exceptional

This poem is absolutely stunning in its grace. And what better subject when describing grace than the ever regal swan. Both the graphics and the poem are excellently done. This contest entry is exceptional. Best of luck in the contest. This one gets my vote. Blessings to you, Linda

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2008

Comment from ritareeact3

Excellent

Exceptional - not only that you were able to create a picture of a swan, but your verse to go with it is beautifully written, creates a vision even without the swan, but the swan adds so much to it. GREAT JOB!

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2008

Comment from LadyMary

Excellent

Certainly did enjoy, and the choice of blue (water) and white (swan) together with the entire layout well projects the image. Writing is excellent. Good luck, LadyMary

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2008

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Absolutely exquisite example of what shape poetry is supposed to look like, Helvi. Very beautiful picture, with words of lovely poetry. Congratulations on this stunning piece.
Indy :>)

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2008

Comment from nora arjuna

Excellent

You produced a really interesting shade Helvi.

It looks as pristine as a swan.

I love the soft melody in your poem too. Wish you all the best.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2008