Ridding Yourself of Demons
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Demon Keeper"A man summons a demon but gets more than he wanted
23 total reviews
Comment from Susan Stec
I enjoyed this and will read on. A newbie here so please be patient with me. You writing is fun to read. I enjoyed the LOL dialog. I will read on.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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I enjoyed this and will read on. A newbie here so please be patient with me. You writing is fun to read. I enjoyed the LOL dialog. I will read on.
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Atruthckr
This is a very good story! I love the irony of a young man conjuring up an impressive demon-slave, only to get a pathetic, whiny imp who makes his life more miserable. The modern-day setting mixed with the old-fashioned "depths of Hell" touches are priceless, and the ending that hints at human sacrifice of the next-door neighbor is the perfect finish. Great job! --Atruthckr
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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This is a very good story! I love the irony of a young man conjuring up an impressive demon-slave, only to get a pathetic, whiny imp who makes his life more miserable. The modern-day setting mixed with the old-fashioned "depths of Hell" touches are priceless, and the ending that hints at human sacrifice of the next-door neighbor is the perfect finish. Great job! --Atruthckr
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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You're very kind, thank you
Comment from TrevorPenick
Can't wait to read the rest. I've yet to come across a 'demon' story with such originality. Everyone tries so hard to vent their own malevolence through their 'demons' that they end up sounding silly and pretensious. It was such a fresh suprise to find the first chapter of what's sure to be a great piece of work. Great job! T.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
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Can't wait to read the rest. I've yet to come across a 'demon' story with such originality. Everyone tries so hard to vent their own malevolence through their 'demons' that they end up sounding silly and pretensious. It was such a fresh suprise to find the first chapter of what's sure to be a great piece of work. Great job! T.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
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I'm flattered. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for your review
Comment from savannah cat
Cute, how did the master end up with demon as a slave. And why is the demon messed up?
Good Luck on your entry.
Savannah Cat
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
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Cute, how did the master end up with demon as a slave. And why is the demon messed up?
Good Luck on your entry.
Savannah Cat
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
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Well, I could answer your questions, but then you wouldn't read the rest of the book.
Thaniks for your review. I'm glad you liked it
Comment from Paradox Tremors
Funny and cute. If we all had little demons to do our bidding, life would be so much more chaotic than ever. Nice flow, easy to follow. Wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2008
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Funny and cute. If we all had little demons to do our bidding, life would be so much more chaotic than ever. Nice flow, easy to follow. Wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2008
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Thank you. I'm glad you found it funny
Comment from BarnCat
Snod -- Really clever story. Reads like silk, dialog right on pitch. This one kind of falls under the heading, be careful what you wish for. I wish to read more! DBL
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2008
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Snod -- Really clever story. Reads like silk, dialog right on pitch. This one kind of falls under the heading, be careful what you wish for. I wish to read more! DBL
Comment Written 19-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2008
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Thank you. Glad you liked it
Comment from Celtic~Soul
Yes, I finally got to read how Paul ended up with that scurvy little demon! A gem and I'm glad you've been adding to the tale. Best of luck in the Story of the Month competition. Paul (and you) deserve to win something after putting up with that horrible Scarth for so long! LOL Well written, well conceived and just plain fun!
Dawn
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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Yes, I finally got to read how Paul ended up with that scurvy little demon! A gem and I'm glad you've been adding to the tale. Best of luck in the Story of the Month competition. Paul (and you) deserve to win something after putting up with that horrible Scarth for so long! LOL Well written, well conceived and just plain fun!
Dawn
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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You're very kind. I appreciate your stamina. Thank you
Comment from GCMaxwell
This is absolutely first rate. Its funny and original. Presnt Scarth the original geeky demon designed to make you laugh, if its not your demon.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2008
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This is absolutely first rate. Its funny and original. Presnt Scarth the original geeky demon designed to make you laugh, if its not your demon.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2008
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Thanks, I'm pleased you found it funny.
Comment from Norzah
A very entertaining piece of writing. It's alludes to the fact that a man can end up in a messy situation when the instruments he had called for (or manufactured) to help him, are faulty. Worse, you will condemned to live with the faulty instruments ( men or weapons) for the rest of your life. Love the read.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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A very entertaining piece of writing. It's alludes to the fact that a man can end up in a messy situation when the instruments he had called for (or manufactured) to help him, are faulty. Worse, you will condemned to live with the faulty instruments ( men or weapons) for the rest of your life. Love the read.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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Wow, I wrote al that?
Thanks for your review. I'm glad it entertained you
Comment from kspierce
Very interesting story. I found the dialog amusing... in fact the story overall really tickled me. Some stories you can actually "see" the characters when reading the dialog and this exchange was one of them. Well written and a good fit in its category.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2008
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Very interesting story. I found the dialog amusing... in fact the story overall really tickled me. Some stories you can actually "see" the characters when reading the dialog and this exchange was one of them. Well written and a good fit in its category.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2008
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You're very kind. I'm glad you were tickled.
