Looking For A Playoff Win
The A,B,C's Of Hockey19 total reviews
Comment from babylonia
this is great fun even if they didn't win the big one. there is next year. :P easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. i actually like hockey even though i don't watch much. imagery is excellent. i felt like i was there. definitely good internal rhyme and rhythm. keep up the good work~
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2008
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this is great fun even if they didn't win the big one. there is next year. :P easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. i actually like hockey even though i don't watch much. imagery is excellent. i felt like i was there. definitely good internal rhyme and rhythm. keep up the good work~
Comment Written 13-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2008
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Thanks, I appreciate the great review! :)
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you are very welcome~
babylonia
Comment from Adam Smith
What an exciting, creative poem. Well put together and creative use of X and Z words. Warren Zevon comes to mind when I read this, "Hit Some One" was one of his lighter tunes. I've not seen much hockey of late, pro or otherwise and this brings back the excitement of the game. I miss the Chicago Black Hawks of the late 70's and early 80's. Particularly games at the "old" stadium. But I also enjoy watching kids play on ice in the park, or on the street in autumn. It's a fascinating game and this poem does it much justice.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2008
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What an exciting, creative poem. Well put together and creative use of X and Z words. Warren Zevon comes to mind when I read this, "Hit Some One" was one of his lighter tunes. I've not seen much hockey of late, pro or otherwise and this brings back the excitement of the game. I miss the Chicago Black Hawks of the late 70's and early 80's. Particularly games at the "old" stadium. But I also enjoy watching kids play on ice in the park, or on the street in autumn. It's a fascinating game and this poem does it much justice.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2008
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Thank you so much for such a wonderful review of my poem. :) I enjoyed all of your comments. ~Dovey
Comment from jshep
There is only one word for this poem: Impressive. You have done an outstanding job of not only creating an Abcedarian poem, but the flow of the poem was great and the subject inspirational and were you not fortunate to be able to use the Z... If I had a six to give you would receive it.
Exceptional job.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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There is only one word for this poem: Impressive. You have done an outstanding job of not only creating an Abcedarian poem, but the flow of the poem was great and the subject inspirational and were you not fortunate to be able to use the Z... If I had a six to give you would receive it.
Exceptional job.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Thanks for a great review, it was my pleasure to read! :)
Comment from carolm5415
Amazing what inspires us! You have done a good job on this difficult poem working all the letters in well but you will have to take a look at how it flows. The meter is off in many places. A little editing will bring this piece up to a five.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Amazing what inspires us! You have done a good job on this difficult poem working all the letters in well but you will have to take a look at how it flows. The meter is off in many places. A little editing will bring this piece up to a five.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Thanks for your thoughts on this poem.
Comment from Miriam Kingfisher
A brilliant running commentary of the game and people. I was gripped by the format instantly. I've played hockey all my life and this drew my attention even more.
Your running style was easy to follow as was your commentary.
Brilliant effort - Keep it up. Next sport in the series??????
Take Care.
Miriam.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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A brilliant running commentary of the game and people. I was gripped by the format instantly. I've played hockey all my life and this drew my attention even more.
Your running style was easy to follow as was your commentary.
Brilliant effort - Keep it up. Next sport in the series??????
Take Care.
Miriam.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Thank you so much Miriam, for the great review and encouraging words. Sports poems don't generally get very well received here, or so it seems. I think most don't share the love for the game, or know anything about it in general. I appreciate your enthusiasm! I do have one other hockey poem and a sort of a 'spoof' football fan poem in my portfolio as well.
Comment from Annmuma
Great poetry. I found myself wanting to cheer for the home team! Good imagery and nice flow. Good structure. Nicely written poem. ann
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Great poetry. I found myself wanting to cheer for the home team! Good imagery and nice flow. Good structure. Nicely written poem. ann
Comment Written 12-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Thanks Ann, I really appreciate you taking the time to review my poem. :)
Comment from tteach
Using the word Zambone is an excellent idea to spur a prose poem. You do a great job, taking us into the game. While I don't understand much of hockey, I have seen bits and pieces of games. You get us into the action, the tense moments, and hold us there.
terry
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Using the word Zambone is an excellent idea to spur a prose poem. You do a great job, taking us into the game. While I don't understand much of hockey, I have seen bits and pieces of games. You get us into the action, the tense moments, and hold us there.
terry
Comment Written 12-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Thanks for your kind review of my poem. :)
Comment from kassey
What a wonderful story in a poem but abcedarian also, extremely well done. This is by far the longest I have seen and you have written a great poem at the same time as the other rules. Excellent work Kay
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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What a wonderful story in a poem but abcedarian also, extremely well done. This is by far the longest I have seen and you have written a great poem at the same time as the other rules. Excellent work Kay
Comment Written 11-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2008
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Thank you so much for a great review Kay :)
Comment from AlvinTEthington
I wish I knew more about sports. But the abcedarian is quite good, tells an interesting story, and has a nice interspersion of true rhymes and slant rhymes. Although you rhyme every two lines, it does not have a "singsongy" quality, due to the fact the story is so well written. Kudos.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2008
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I wish I knew more about sports. But the abcedarian is quite good, tells an interesting story, and has a nice interspersion of true rhymes and slant rhymes. Although you rhyme every two lines, it does not have a "singsongy" quality, due to the fact the story is so well written. Kudos.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2008
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Thank you so much for your review of this poem. I was actually listening to the game on the radio while I was writing it. :) I had fun with that piece. Kim
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
great job, Dovey. congratulations to your hockey team, the Nanooks. their inspired play seemed to also work magic for you as you wrote your contest entry. good luck to you.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2008
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great job, Dovey. congratulations to your hockey team, the Nanooks. their inspired play seemed to also work magic for you as you wrote your contest entry. good luck to you.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2008
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thanks so much for your kind review :) they lost the next night, but it was an exciting season :)
