American Aggression
An abcedarian36 total reviews
Comment from complicatedrenee
I am giving you five stars, not because I give them freely, but because you deserve it. I nearly got ol' Webster out to verify some of the definitions after reading, but you have so kindly offered the definitions in your notes. This is a great piece. I have never seen this style of poetry. You definately rocked the style.
Renee'
reply by the author on 01-May-2008
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I am giving you five stars, not because I give them freely, but because you deserve it. I nearly got ol' Webster out to verify some of the definitions after reading, but you have so kindly offered the definitions in your notes. This is a great piece. I have never seen this style of poetry. You definately rocked the style.
Renee'
Comment Written 01-May-2008
reply by the author on 01-May-2008
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Thanks. You might also enjoy my other abecedarians, especially "Sherman." Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from llaliberte
I thank you for this poem, I appreciate your comments at the end, they did help. I am surprised it is not longer . You did a nice job here, would like to see more. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 01-May-2008
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I thank you for this poem, I appreciate your comments at the end, they did help. I am surprised it is not longer . You did a nice job here, would like to see more. Keep writing.
Comment Written 01-May-2008
reply by the author on 01-May-2008
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Thanks. And was it not your picture I used? It fit perfectly. Thanks for your kind words.
Comment from Fish
This a great topical piece written in what seems
an impossible format to convey what you have
so succinctly described. Oh, the horror! Nice
work. Yours, Fish
reply by the author on 01-May-2008
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This a great topical piece written in what seems
an impossible format to convey what you have
so succinctly described. Oh, the horror! Nice
work. Yours, Fish
Comment Written 30-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 01-May-2008
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Yes, it is horrible. I wish more people realized it. Thanks for the good review.
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Alvin. This is a very well written piece of poetry in abecedarian style. You have described the war in Iraq very well. Good luck
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
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Hi Alvin. This is a very well written piece of poetry in abecedarian style. You have described the war in Iraq very well. Good luck
Comment Written 30-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
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Thank you for thoroughly understanding what I wanted to convey here.
Comment from bard owl
This is an amazing creation. Using the letters of the alphabet (in order) to create a commentary of the sadness of war takes true love of words and talent. Your poem reflects the feelings of so many of us. The Iraqi war is a travesty. This is a masterpiece. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
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This is an amazing creation. Using the letters of the alphabet (in order) to create a commentary of the sadness of war takes true love of words and talent. Your poem reflects the feelings of so many of us. The Iraqi war is a travesty. This is a masterpiece. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 30-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
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Thank you. This lifted my spirits at a time they needed lifted. You always seemed to know just when.
Comment from Victoria...
This is excellent. I can't imagine how much work must go into your abc poems and have them still make this much sense. And I agree with your sentiment wholeheartedly. You get one of my sixers for this.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
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This is excellent. I can't imagine how much work must go into your abc poems and have them still make this much sense. And I agree with your sentiment wholeheartedly. You get one of my sixers for this.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
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I truly appreciate the six stars, Victoria. You are so kind.
Comment from Thomas Raine
Nice job, my friend - I haven't heard of this form before, but there are so many, I could never keep count. Must've been tough, especially the X and Z, but you seem to have a strong lexicon.
Thanks for sharing!
- TR
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
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Nice job, my friend - I haven't heard of this form before, but there are so many, I could never keep count. Must've been tough, especially the X and Z, but you seem to have a strong lexicon.
Thanks for sharing!
- TR
Comment Written 29-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
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Yes, it comes from teaching vocabulary for years. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from mmichelle97219
Makes sense to me. I thought this was an intelligent societal commentary poetically formatted into something that reads so pretty. Well done.
Michelle
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
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Makes sense to me. I thought this was an intelligent societal commentary poetically formatted into something that reads so pretty. Well done.
Michelle
Comment Written 29-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
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Thank you; you are very kind.
Comment from Sylvia Page
This is a challenging style to poetry and I applaud your magnificent work. It has not only brought out true meaning you have made it flow well. Excellent work. Best wishes and good luck in the contest
Happy writing
Sylvia
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
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This is a challenging style to poetry and I applaud your magnificent work. It has not only brought out true meaning you have made it flow well. Excellent work. Best wishes and good luck in the contest
Happy writing
Sylvia
Comment Written 29-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
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Thank you very much. It is not easy to make abecedarians flow well, and I thank you for noticing that.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Alvin,
Six stars, my friend. I learned a few things here ...
I didn't realize that in abcedarian-style poetry you could have the words follow each other vs. a new letter starts the beginning of each line (did you understand that?!). Also, before I got to your author's notes, I looked up two words and then laughed to find the definitions on the bottom. I realize most will not look up words. The two words that I looked up were:
xenophobic AND zeitgeist
(WOW ... Excellent word use and imagery once one looks up the words.)
This poem reads and flows extremely well. I particularly liked the following line:
xenophobic yearlong zeitgeist
(MY FAVORITE)
This was a pleasure to read. Keep writing. I like the "brainy" side of your writing.
Regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
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Hello Alvin,
Six stars, my friend. I learned a few things here ...
I didn't realize that in abcedarian-style poetry you could have the words follow each other vs. a new letter starts the beginning of each line (did you understand that?!). Also, before I got to your author's notes, I looked up two words and then laughed to find the definitions on the bottom. I realize most will not look up words. The two words that I looked up were:
xenophobic AND zeitgeist
(WOW ... Excellent word use and imagery once one looks up the words.)
This poem reads and flows extremely well. I particularly liked the following line:
xenophobic yearlong zeitgeist
(MY FAVORITE)
This was a pleasure to read. Keep writing. I like the "brainy" side of your writing.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 29-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
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Thanks. You made me feel really good. And you don't know how long it took me to come up with the X, Y, and Z lines. Yes, the only way to write a syntactically correct abecedarian is to break up the lines sometimes.
