Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted March 18, 2018


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A Pantoum

What More Will It Take?

by Mrs. KT

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As we gaze upwards to the vast evening sky
Our possibilities, too, should be intense and glowing…   
We profess to know what is right - and often we try -
Yet fears and insecurities we are always sowing
 
Our possibilities, too, should be intense and glowing…
Conflict and chaos might then well abate
Yet fears and insecurities we are always sowing
We find ourselves relentlessly mired in hate
 
Conflict and chaos might then well abate?
What an incredibly naïve goal
We find ourselves relentlessly mired in hate
Educated, advanced, but possessing no soul
 
What an incredibly naïve goal
I ask you, “What more will it take?”
Educated, advanced, but possessing no soul
To come to terms with mankind’s mistakes
 
I ask you, “What more will it take?”
Every day, we make the decision to choose
To come to terms with mankind’s mistakes
How much more do we dare to lose?
 
Every day we make the decision to choose
We profess to know what is right – and often we try
How much more do we dare to lose 
As we gaze upwards to the vast evening sky…

 

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Punctuation is written as intended.


In a traditional Pantoum:
The lines are grouped into quatrains (4-line stanzas).
The final line of the Pantoum must be the same as its first line.
A Pantoum has any number of quatrains.
Lines may be of any length.
The Pantoum has a rhyme scheme of abab in each quatrain. Thus, the lines rhyme alternately.
The Pantoum says everything twice:
1. For all quatrains except the first, the first line of the current quatrain repeats the second line in the preceding quatrain; and the third line of the current quatrain repeats the fourth line of the preceding quatrain.
2. In addition, for the final quatrain, its second line repeats the (so-far unrepeated) third line in the first quatrain; and its last line repeats the (so-far unrepeated) first line of the first quatrain.
3. Thus the pattern of line-repetition is as follows, where the lines of the first quatrain are represented by the numbers "1 2 3 4":

1 2 3 4 - Lines in first quatrain.
2 5 4 6 - Lines in second quatrain.
5 7 6 8 - Lines in third quatrain.
7 9 8 10 - Lines in fourth quatrain.
9 3 10 1 - Lines in fifth and final quatrain.

In this example, we have 5 quatrains. You could have more. You could have fewer.

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