General Poetry posted August 16, 2017 Chapters:  ...57 58 -59- 60... 


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...an Octogram

A chapter in the book My Book of Poems 2010-2017

Summer Days

by Mustang Patty

I take my dogs out for their walks,
and Life's sure sweet,
and Steaming, dewy green'ry stalks;
Sunny rays beat.
Hot pavement makes my dogs walk fast,
Do 'doggy bus'ness' at the last.
Heading home, we avoid the street,
and Life's sure sweet.
 
the pastel lines of children's chalks,
we see a treat,
Above, the birds begin their squawks
My dogs are beat.
at home, the sweet cool water waits,
and breakfast kibble's on the plates.
Rumbly tummies just long to eat
and Life's sure sweet.

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Big THANK YOU to Debbie (dejohnsrld) for a great deal of help with iambic meter. This is greatly edited.

This poem is an octogram as created by fellow Fanstorian, Sally Yocom. It has two stanzas of 8 lines each. The syllable count is 84848884 84848884. The rhyme scheme is aBabccbB ababddbB. Capital B indicates an exact repeated line. This poetry form calls for strict iambic meter

I know I'm in need of help with the iambic meter - any help would be greatly appreciated!
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