Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Word From Home"Young girl with special abilities.
16 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Some people do like solitude and prefer the peace over the bustle of everyday life.
"retched woman with the dirty hair" is descriptive of the aunt. And, "retched" should be wretched.
"pulling the letter out" should be and pulling the letter out.
"I'll bet its his mother's" should be I'll bet it's his mother's.
Does anyone ever really win in a war?
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Some people do like solitude and prefer the peace over the bustle of everyday life.
"retched woman with the dirty hair" is descriptive of the aunt. And, "retched" should be wretched.
"pulling the letter out" should be and pulling the letter out.
"I'll bet its his mother's" should be I'll bet it's his mother's.
Does anyone ever really win in a war?
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Brett. I appreciate the nice review and the edit advice. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
I'm still unsure about Lester's aunt holding back letters from people, but each time it happens, it intrigues me more and deepens her character.
This is a great chapter, Gretchen.
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I'm still unsure about Lester's aunt holding back letters from people, but each time it happens, it intrigues me more and deepens her character.
This is a great chapter, Gretchen.
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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She's a piece of work for sure. Hopefully, she'll get what is coming to her. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a lovely chapter as the children take the letter to Artie. They are being forced to grow up in many ways sooner because of the war. Artie is also suffering as he is so distant from his family. It might be a good idea to let the reader know which army he was inducted into, the USA or Germany. If his mother is in Germany, the kids could mention the odd stamp that brought it to Artie. If she is in the USA they could be surprised.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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This is a lovely chapter as the children take the letter to Artie. They are being forced to grow up in many ways sooner because of the war. Artie is also suffering as he is so distant from his family. It might be a good idea to let the reader know which army he was inducted into, the USA or Germany. If his mother is in Germany, the kids could mention the odd stamp that brought it to Artie. If she is in the USA they could be surprised.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you for that. I appreciate the help. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
this is a delightful post. I'm glad that Lester had the courage to sneak the letter out of the post office.
He and Letty are starting to get an inkling of what is important in life, the feeling of security and of pending loss.
Having Artie receive the letter and share it with the kids was a good touch. We sometimes forget that everyone has a family, even our enemies, and loving them isn't something that we alone experience. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
this is a delightful post. I'm glad that Lester had the courage to sneak the letter out of the post office.
He and Letty are starting to get an inkling of what is important in life, the feeling of security and of pending loss.
Having Artie receive the letter and share it with the kids was a good touch. We sometimes forget that everyone has a family, even our enemies, and loving them isn't something that we alone experience. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Tom. Your review means the world to me. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'd think that most everyone has had a summer romance, or at least I'd hope they have, because it would be a shame to go a lifetime without one. LOL. But sadly, they most always had to end. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I'd think that most everyone has had a summer romance, or at least I'd hope they have, because it would be a shame to go a lifetime without one. LOL. But sadly, they most always had to end. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Summertime romances can be fun but they can also be distraction from the real world. Thank you for this. Gretchen
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Distractions can be a good thing. :-)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Aw... poor Lester and Heddy... I hope he doesn't have to go. The scene with the kids and l.Artie is very touching. Lester is a good kid. It looks like the kids are falling in love.
I love it, well done!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Aw... poor Lester and Heddy... I hope he doesn't have to go. The scene with the kids and l.Artie is very touching. Lester is a good kid. It looks like the kids are falling in love.
I love it, well done!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much. First love is something special. Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind review and the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Great descriptive setting. It kind of puts the reader in a certain mood. You've done well with that. Some gallows humor here as we identify the aunt: "Your aunt is the retched woman with the dirty hair that works at the post office?"Lester nods. "Yes, sir." the ending is poetic and mysterious very well done.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Great descriptive setting. It kind of puts the reader in a certain mood. You've done well with that. Some gallows humor here as we identify the aunt: "Your aunt is the retched woman with the dirty hair that works at the post office?"Lester nods. "Yes, sir." the ending is poetic and mysterious very well done.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Liz. I really appreciate your review. Gretchen
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Comment from Wendy G
A lovely chapter, very moving and one sees so clearly the stupidity of war when the people fighting are all the same inside, but having to follow the orders of those in charge - who never get their hands dirty in battle. Well written. Typo: "retched" should be "wretched"
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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A lovely chapter, very moving and one sees so clearly the stupidity of war when the people fighting are all the same inside, but having to follow the orders of those in charge - who never get their hands dirty in battle. Well written. Typo: "retched" should be "wretched"
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate the nice review and the helpful edit. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, Gretchen, that was so sad. But I'm absolulutely positive that in real live, he wouldn't have been alone in not wanting that war. The majority were just ordinary folk who wanted nothing more than to get on with their own lives with all their loved ones around them. Heddy and Lester understand this, why don't the leaders of such wars understand too? This was a lovely chapter, my friend, sad, but still nice. Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Aww, Gretchen, that was so sad. But I'm absolulutely positive that in real live, he wouldn't have been alone in not wanting that war. The majority were just ordinary folk who wanted nothing more than to get on with their own lives with all their loved ones around them. Heddy and Lester understand this, why don't the leaders of such wars understand too? This was a lovely chapter, my friend, sad, but still nice. Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review. I'm so happy you are still enjoying this. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
The children's sense of freedom and security contrast sharply with the war raging abroad and we're shown the skilfully evocative range of your writing here, Gretchen. Once again we see some lovely imagery and personification of the island ("It doesn't matter what kind of mood she's in").
Small edits: "Your aunt is the (w)retched woman..."
"I'll bet it(')s his mother's face..
Thanks for sharing another excellent chapter, Gretchen! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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The children's sense of freedom and security contrast sharply with the war raging abroad and we're shown the skilfully evocative range of your writing here, Gretchen. Once again we see some lovely imagery and personification of the island ("It doesn't matter what kind of mood she's in").
Small edits: "Your aunt is the (w)retched woman..."
"I'll bet it(')s his mother's face..
Thanks for sharing another excellent chapter, Gretchen! Debbie
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I appreciate the kind review and the edits. Gretchen
