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2024 Japanese Poetry

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Last night I watched a Hallmark movie. A city girl, Lily, was in the country and the hero, a country boy, Will can up to her. She said something about she didn't realize how noisy crickets were. Will slightly teased her, but mentioned they weren't crickets but frogs. Your poem reminded me of that scene. It was adorable as is your poem.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, Barbara. I appreciate your time reading and reviewing my poem.

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Comment from GWHARGIS
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This was a very majestic poem. I love the sound of a cricket chirping. I used to listen to recordings of crickets to go to sleep. This was soothing poem. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, Gretchen.

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Comment from lyenochka
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A lovely busso poem! And I enjoyed how you made the sunset a concert complete with a stage with the growing light of the prima donna moon and the songs of the crickets and the dance of the winds!

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Big Sister. I appreciate your review and insightful feedback.

    love,
    marival
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
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I loved this one - beautiful in so many ways- lovely alliteration (where weaving winds) (flower-full moon)and a very creative phrase (over warm
tangerine hills).

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
    Thank you, I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and insightful feedback.

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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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The image is fantastic; it looks like a view from a ranch where the frogs and crickets chirp throughout the night. The soft summer breeze is tender to the skin but then you hear that chirping again. No more softness.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


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    Thank you, Rosemary. I appreciate your review and insightful feedback.

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Comment from royowen
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Just love your common sense approach to writing, you've worked out the language perfectly for the specialist short form Japanese poetry, and write it brilliantly, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : (lightening) one lightens a load, but lightning strikes.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Roy. I'll fix that, thank you. I appreciate your review and insightful feedback.

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reply by royowen on 08-Jan-2024
    No wonder
Comment from shelley kaye
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this was so rich in colourful imagery!
it totally felt like i was there feeling the breeze!
great word choices and smooth flow

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Shelley. I appreciate your review and insightful feedback.

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Comment from jim vecchio
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You've proven you're the Boss of the Busso! Such a melodious ringing of words and another set of wonderful images presented in the best possible colors and presentation. I am awestruck by the beauty of this work.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Jim. I appreciate your review and insightful feedback.

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reply by jim vecchio on 08-Jan-2024
    And I just love your works!
Comment from Navada
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As a theatre lover, I could really relate! :) I really liked the differing senses evoked here, from "serenades" to "tangerine" to "lightening". With the reference to the "weaving winds" as well, there is a sense of warmth, action and fecundity lingering in these word choices. Lovely!

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Navada. I appreciate your review and insightful feedback.

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Comment from patcelaw
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This is a very interesting Japanese poem that you have written. I enjoyed listening to it, and I also enjoyed your notes at the end. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia

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 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Patricia. I appreciate your review and insightful feedback.

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